I love everyone’s comments.
Please keep on going, don’t stop! This is exciting!
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I’d say this song is fitting for any chapter in my book:
Or anyone else’s book, for that matter. This song is gorgeous and sad! ˓(ᑊᘩᑊ⋆)
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Two possible songs for a chapter-sized chapter segment that might turn up much later in my work.
Scene:
Dov and Krista had an accident in a villa stairwell, Krista lost a large patch of skin and soft tissue from her right shoulder, and Dov and Freyja attempt to mend Krista’s wound in the girls’ bedroom. Dov wanted to take Krista to a hospital, her wound required a surgeon and anesthetics. But Krista is terrified of hospitals (going there as a patient) and she persuades Dov to clean her wound and apply a battlefield dressing, knowing it will cause great discomfort and a patchwork scar. The trio then try to comfort each other while mending Krista’s wound and dealing with the trauma of causing their close friend considerable (unnecessary) pain.
This is also the first time Freyja lies, or commits herself to a lie. Krista demands the stairwell accident be kept a secret between the trio, and that she takes the blame for her wound. Dov and Freyja agree to protect Krista’s secret, and they become closer companions.
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All of you, feel free to come back as many times as you can.
I’ve been thinking about a scene that I might need in two chapters time.
Scene within
Late Tuesday night, Krista is unable to sleep and sneaks out of her room. The blanket-laden Dov and Freyja find Krista huddled by the panoramic windows of Karen’s office, hugging her giant teddy bear…Polanski encountered the pair searching for Krista, predicted where her daughter would be, and told Dov to keep the girls warm tonight…Krista admits she’s anxious about her father (and Karen’s mercenaries) returning tomorrow. If they will all arrive home okay, if will they have casualties, and if they will like Dov and Freyja.
Dov offers to keep watch while Krista and Freyja sleep. Krista insists on staying awake in case any news arrives. But she soon drifts off bundled up in Freyja’s lap, cocooned beneath two blankets.
The next morning, and the next chapter, Krista awakes as Freyja caresses her cheek to find Dov standing to attention, with the teddy propped on his side, gesturing out the window with the teddy’s paw. Krista turns to the window as three Mi-24 Hind gunships, with two IAF AH-64 Longbow escorts, rumble over the sand dunes speeding towards the villa. They’re home.
True to his word, Dov did not sleep last night, and Freyja stayed up with him. Neither companion appear affected by their long watch duty…Dov - ex Commando; Freyja - chip regulated metabolism and organ function; sleep - optional…
PS. Why can’t I think of scenes coherently? So far for this work they always turn up in a jumbled order.
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Retrieving this thread from the dusty depths of the interwebs.
Freyja’s mood music when someone threatens Dov in her presence…
Hannah made this mistake early Tuesday morning, greeting her new housemates at gunpoint, but Dov calmed the situation before bloodshed. Dov was more unnerved than Hannah by Freyja’s silent, barely contained fury. Although Freyja knew nothing about fighting, or weapons, her desire to protect Dov and atomise the perceived threat made her shortfalls irrelevant.
Some women are more dangerous than shotguns ~ The Godfather Film.
The training is nothing, the will is everything ~ Batman Begins.
And what’s currently playing on Radio Krista.
…and a selection inspired by her new housemates…
That’s our Krista, subtle as a howitzer ~ Polanski.
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Chigachad Pingu is the sort of thing I’d expect to see in a fever dream. But at least that would mean that he would be nicer to his little sister, Pinga.
