Here is an introduction into a novel I am going to work on next.
We are monsters
We are demons
We are beasts
We are schemers
We are liars
We are pretenders
We are strangers
We are deceivers
We are marauders
We are the many threats in the presence of madness.
Thoughts and feelings?
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Tone influences everything. Good thing to focus on.
Was it bad? How much does it take for it to work?
I do love it, maybe a bit too long or wordy towards the end.
First off, ANY starting point is good: you did something.
It reads like poetry to me, which a lot of fantasy will do as a header but not the proper start of the story. I’m generally a person who skips the headers.
If you decide to tighten it up, later, I think the last line is most important to keep.
Thanks.
Now, I need to tighten it up when the moment comes.
bump.
Update:
I am making this into a short story collection.
its a style of writing or a technique called read and sung when things repeat.
things can be a word repeating, phrase repeating, things visually repeating, things auditorily repeating etc.
sometimes doing this technique can help us come up with things more outside the box then our first impulse/s.
sometimes it emphasizes things.
other times it minimizes things
other times it can make the subtext more varied.
other times it can have an effect. → the effect depends on the work.
repetition is an effective tool in writing. redundancy is not.
Thank you. Also I never did start this short story collection, unfortunately.