So, does he really have no regard for his family, or does he see them as somehow tainted and which have to be eliminated for his idea of a better future? Or maybe they try to stop him and he thinks his villainy is a necessary evil? What does he think about his own actions when he’s alone with his thoughts?
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I saw this and kinda laughed because I was just watching historical documentaries about such royals 
They always do, don’t they? Well, those were the times.
Has he had a statue sculpted for him yet? Has he had his face stamped on a coin yet? Does he have a temple?
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So, is that ever going to get him in too much trouble he can’t dig himself out of? 
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Quick question: How do you really feel about spoilers? I can’t explain things without revealing a shit ton, and this story isn’t even published yet.
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Kalar sounds like such an interesting character and such a well-crafted one, too!
He seems like an anti-hero…though not sure if it fully applies to him.
From what I read, you seem to have thought him out quite well
He reminds me a little of what I’m trying to make Pinti (blue bipedal feline) become. She’s faced with such a horrible evil (death of her family) which makes her desire revenge, but her idea of revenge is doing the same thing her enemies did to her (destroy what her enemy cares about) and worse because she’s fueled with anger (destroy his entire race). She becomes desperate for this revenge and takes bigger and bigger risks to get there fast…and this will become her undoing.
Will Kalar ever go to such extremes that it will eventually be his undoing? Is he blinded by his desires in any way?
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In what kinds of situations does she realize this?
Example from Pinti’s case where she doesn’t realize her meanness; Pinti will do things she would have once thought horrible and evil, but the more she justifies her actions, the more she becomes numb to everything. It will eventually be her undoing, but she stops seeing it as mean because no one is there to tell her. She’s also fresh out of seeing her family murdered, so that doesn’t help. She becomes kind of erratic and takes bigger and bigger risks.
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The internal thoughts, nothing fully concrete.
…changes were made…a bit.
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I don’t care Hide what you need to hide if you feel like you have to.
It’s different reading something and having it being explained to you. Besides, you’re the only one who knows which part of the story is a spoiler. I wouldn’t know.
There might even be some things about Elgana I’ve told you which are actually spoilers, but you wouldn’t know, would you?
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Alrighty then.
Spoiler
A curse is placed on his family because of a summoning gone wrong and a bunch of other familial dramas. The curse is caused by a false god who placed a curse on the family and is trying to get revenge for some greater purpose. The ones who break the curse are viewed as the traitor to the family or are killed off by people close to the false god. However, the curse has such a strong hold on the family that nobody truly knows what their true personality is supposed to be, rather what it just is. It makes Aeris wonder if her family is as loving as they normally are. Once the curse is broken, their personality changes and it ends with them either broken, dead, or betrayed. Mephisto broke the of his brother’s death and the false god’s failing…sorta.
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This has been going on for decades?
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Time is different on Alagossia.
So, decades to centuries.
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Have you figured out how it’s different compared to Earth time?
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From this year, 2024, it’s 200 years ahead.
Yet the technology on Alagossia is 5 to 10 years ahead of 2024 Earth.
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It hasn’t yet so we’ll find out 
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When you say “ahead”, you mean the year is 2224?
Was it created the same time as Earth? But it advanced faster?
Elgana is kind of ahead of Earth technologically. Just a tad thanks to magick. It is billions of years younger than Earth, but that’s just Elgana as the six-torus-planets world. Each torus planet was already developed quite a bit by the time they merged to become Elgana. As Elgana, it’s only been around 800 years. The individual rings? I have no idea. Each one might be as old as Earth. Who knows 
Super ancient probably
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Yes.
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Yeah.
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This sounds like such an interesting arc that can go in so many directions, but also feels so relatable. The absolute devastation of being one of the last people of your race provokes a rage and grief that seems almost insurmountable.
Has Pinti ever crossed a line that takes her from ‘hero’ to perhaps ‘anti-hero’?
Oh yeah. When the story takes place, he’s in a position where the character, and reader, are properly deceived by him. But his goals have always been hurtling towards crossing a line that brings him to irredeemable heights.
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Ooh!
Just had a strange ass thought about a Planetary Gathering, where all the planets come together to chat and talk about stories of the creation of the universe, the different dimensions they hail from, the random creatures and being that live on the planet and more.
Some planets are WAY older than Earth, some are way younger than Earth, and others are an oddity in terms of planet’s ages.
Just a weird thought. Sorry.
I like how your planet gives almost Saturn vibes, but done in a unique way.
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Oh yes, she will.
Kalar reminds me of another character’s situation.
Sounds similar to how Jack Ogswold started. He’s a charismatic gallery owner with a dark history in murder and theft. His story begins during the height of his life and goes downhill fast, but his backstory begins with him going towards an evil act that changed his life.
The first time around, it’s told from his perspective to an audience, and him being an unreliable narrator, it sounds like what he did was in self-defense. It’s justified. While he’s not exactly a squeaky clean, innocent kind of person, it sounds like he’s the victim who had no choice.
Then later he tells the same story in a more vulnerable setting and being a little more honest to the audience and himself. Now it sounds like he committed a horribly evil act, but still believes it is justified.
But which will you believe? Was it called for or uncalled for? I leave it up to the reader and let them decide if they forgive Jack for what he did.
So, as Kalar goes towards irredeemable heights, what’s in store for him after? Will the reader be left unsure if they should cheer him on or will there still be something the reader can cling to? If he can’t be redeemed, is this the story of a tragic character whose arc goes downhill?
Am I making sense? 
My brain is fried.