Struggling Writers’ Daily Den: rant, share, complain, ask, daily progress thing (Part 2)

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a little chapter feedback for moi?

Okay here’s the deal, I’m editing my book and I got a comment/recommendation from one beta reader that I didn’t get from any of the others. I’ve gone through the section a few times now and I don’t think I’m seeing what the reader saw, but I’m still stuck on the comment. And thus I come to you, dear Wackies. The section is a chapter and a half (a little over 2800 words), there are some content warnings that are pretty mild but i’ll leave a specific list, and it would help me out a lot if anyone…

pls my brain is sticking