Thank you for this 
How is your writing going?
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Thank you for your kind words and encouragement. I’m hoping that I can build up the passion again with audiochapters. End of the day, I’ll prolly keep going. Thanks very much again. 
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✧･ﾟ: * ✧･ﾟ:* Be nice to yourself. It’s hard to be happy when someone’s mean to you all the time.✧･ﾟ: *✧･ﾟ: *
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Thank you very much.
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My writings going pretty good so far. Currently working between two different stories. I hope to have them done by the time 2024 comes. I think I can do it. Ive made good pogress on both and its only April.
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You’re very welcome! Us writers need to be there for each other if no one else will, even our ownselves.
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Sometimes we get so distracted by the mountain that we forget we can scale it a few steps at a time. Happens to me a lot. You can do it! 
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I have a little rant 
The first five pages…
make or break the story for readers?
The pressure is on.
So, I give the first few paragraphs to one person and another person. One says “how about this?” and the change makes it so much better, and the other…well…
The feedback was not about the actual story being interesting or about the story flow. It was “show us what the setting and characters look like”. But I said the character is waking up from bed and pushing her covers off. I said her sister is sleeping. Do I have to say “we are in a room with wooden walls and two beds, one which her sister slept peacefully…”?
I’m not doing a boring “describe the setting while waking up” scene. I’m getting Pinti up and out of the room, wash her face all the while she remembers oh yeah, I’m the clan leader now, oh shoot. and getting all worried. “Why did I say I was ready? I didn’t have to. He gave me the option. But without me, who else can heal with magick? And I joked about being the best, but now I have to make big decisions?”
Also not doing a cliche mirror scene or have the character describe herself. Her father tells her “don’t worry about braiding your mane or combing your fur, hurry up” and she twitches her tail tip or her whiskers. I say her father twiddles his thumbs and at one point, Pinti thinks about “the other bipeds like us that live on the planet”.
Then she thinks about her blue fur being different from others of her kind. Is that not enough?
Also, I’m not going to describe whether or not they have a fireplace or what their dining table looks like. Maybe I will later in a slower scene, but they have a meeting to go to and Pinti has to deal with a Hunter that is not willing to cooperate at first, addressing her father when she is the new leader.
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I am not starting with a dream sequence.
I have a pet peeve with that.
If I said she was roused from sleep, had a good dream and could no longer remember it, why would I begin the story with that dream? There is no point. Maybe I shouldn’t even say she had a dream?
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This advice is inscrutable. I think she meant physical description of the characters but I am not sure.
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@JohnnyTuturro I found Julio
Right, physical description, which I gave Just not in a paragraph-long sequence, but peppered throughout the first few pages.
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Anyway, quite like this:
Yon emerged from the Hunter’s house, spear in paw. “We’re not stepping on the goat’s tail, Virlan. Not an immediate worry."
Because they have goats, they have sayings with goats.
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Well yeah, there’s lots of sayings with goats. I think the reviewer is focusing on the wrong things.
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I think I’ll stick with the first reviewer. Her suggestion made the beginning so much better and she didn’t tell me to go into a long description about a dream sequence or character description.
One of the suggestions of second reviewer was to have the character compare herself to her father “she has his chin, she has his hair” and his hair is this and his chin is that… like…why would I?
I think that is how THEY would write the story. Start with a dream, oh father is calling me, oh the dream is fading… Not how I would. I think it’s a bit biased advice.
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I love working on multiple things at once, too. You sound like you’re doing really well, so good job! I think you can do it too.
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This is my favorite way to do it. In my opinion, unless done very smoothly, it can read as clumsy when there’s just a giant chunk of character description.
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Want to get back to Red Reign, but I am afraid of the outcome… the physical outcome.
When I get hyperfocus, my body gets affected in the worst way.
It is hard as hell to take it easy when I write. I just feeling all the exhaustion times ten and it is NOT a great thing.
Does anyone else on here with ADHD get those hyperfocus moments, when you start to really feel EVERYTHING attack your body on a terrible physical level?
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I got a lot of writing done yesterday (wrote with friends), but today I’m… very sick. We’ll see how it goes.
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