Take it easy.
Try to get a few words in and if you can’t it is totally okay to stop.
These are my words to you AND me.
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You need a survey of how many of your rwaders need description right off the bat and how many do not, if youre worried about writing to your audience.
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Thanks, but I’m not even there yet 
It was just a response to the first few paragraphs and then I changed it again.
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I finally feel better about chapter 1!
I think I created a healthy balance of Pinti being an irresponsible kid and being a responsible adult. Also a healthy balance of her knowing her father believes in her, but also wondering if he only wants her to be his successor because she has magick that he needs.
Now I can move on.
Three days behind on editing a chapter a day.
I also decided that Pinti’s story will start at the exact same time that Scotch’s story starts: in the spring. Because they meet in the summer. Well, not really meet. They notice each other across a crowd, both standing out in a different way.
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I am going to start The Pillars of Eradelia: The Blinding Apocalypse | Book 1 in a smidge I like the idea.
I still have Red Reign: The Breaker of Phantom Rituals to get to and I haven’t forgotten it. I just want to be well-prepared for the chapter fifteen and then part 4.
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Not as in dropping the writing in and asking, but jaut a simple question to readwrs on your platforms and thwir respknses. If few of them say they need descriptions, then that type fo response is never a priority as your fan base doesn’t need it.
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Thank you. We got this - even one word is one more than we had before.
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Thanks a bunches and sorry for the late reply!
Don’t worry about it! The great thing about forums is the ability to reply on your own time.
Anyway, hope you were able to have a good writing day :]
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I am currently breaking a writing “rule”: dont switch POVs (i.e. First/Third)
Saint Love is a dual first person POV story but for this one chapter, im gonna switch to Third as a way to show dissociation. The POV character (Travie) is mainly observing his actions like he’s dreaming instead of him simply narrating what happens.
We’ll see if it works out in the end. I like the outcome so far and I’ll probably finish up the chapter tonight.
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All the best writing comes from bending the rules
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The Night Circus by Erin Morgenstern is written in first, second and third, and it’s wildly successful. Do your thing! ☜(ˆ▿ˆc)
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Did a little bit of chapter 15 of part in Red Reign, and now I shall do a little bit of The Pillars of Eradelia’s chapter 1.
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Can’t innovate if you’re always staying within the lines 
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THREE POVs??
I wonder how they do it. I might have to check that out.
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As I recall, the first few chapters are in third person, present tense. Then later after new characters are introduced, those characters talk in either first person or second person, depending on who it is. Also it alternates between present tense and past tense, depending on who’s narrating. Always in separate chapters, though. She never changes pov or tense in the same chapter. ( ˆ◡ˆ)۶ ٩(˘◡˘ )
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Can anyone with siblings offer some input? I’m an only child so I want to be accurate, not like in anime where it’s all “Oni-chan, I wuv you, don’t leave me,” bc as far as I know, that’s not realistic haha 
Anyway, I’m dealing with a handful of characters. Carlo and Melody are actual siblings. She is older than Carlo by 2 years. Then there are another two characters, male, who grew up with Carlo as best friends, not related but treated each other like brothers. Melody married one of the best friends but something tragic happened to him and he passed (don’t have a name for him yet so let’s call him Jim lol). The best friend that remains (name is Joao) is a little younger than Melody, the same age as Carlo or maybe I’ll add 1 more year. Joao’s always been in love with Melody, but it was unrequited when they were growing up and he was genuinely happy for her when she married Jim.
Anyway since Jim’s passing, she’s had a lot of anger in her grief and wants revenge on the person who un-alived her husband. Joao has been doing all he can to support her/be present in her life without pressuring her, but he does hope that some day she can acknowledge him, problem is, she treats him as a “little brother” as a defense mechanism because she’s afraid to move on.
So, what kinds of things would annoy someone who is a grown adult, and they want the person they love to treat them as an equal but that person keeps underestimating them/treating them like a little brother? I’m trying to think of things big sisters do/say with their little brothers. Ideas?
Eventually Melody will accept Joao’s feelings and they’ll live happily ever after in their own way, but for now, Joao is becoming frustrated that Melody refuses to see him “as a man” versus “my brother’s friend/deceased husband’s friend/like a little bro.” 
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hands you a card Welcome to the club! Please take a seat with me as we gather information together!
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I thought of one idea. I was thinking Joao would be the youngest of the three friends, but he’s the tallest. 
So whenever Melody is introducing him, she says stuff like, “Don’t be fooled by his size, he’s the baby of the bunch,” and well, that starts to bug Joao a bit. A “baby”? Woman, you’re only 3 yrs older than me! 
Still brainstorming.
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How long is too long for a vision sequence?
The thing about this vision is that the one giving the vision has to wake up for the vision to end.
And the one giving the vision lives very far away, and has not woken up so, two characters called into the vision are stuck just waiting in the vision and some things go down between them as in some annoyances. Which have to do with the plot, of course.
I’m trying not to make it too long.
And the one that gave the vision has already left the scene. Instead of being all mysterious, she ends up saying, “well, I can’t keep this vision dream thing up for so long, so I end up being mysterious and cryptic. The rest, you have to think for yourself. Alright? Goodbye.” and then leaves
This vision person has this kind of personality, so it’s not weird. She does come up in the story again. But it does seem a little out of place at the moment.
Should I or should I not do it if she won’t come up again for another 3 chapters? At least 3 chapters. Maybe 4.
MC and the other character stuck in the vision do not know her…yet. She doesn’t even introduce herself. Should she?