@Akje: Yeah, I tend to do that in heat of the moment then soon regret much later.
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I wrote this thing. Geoffrey is a rich, greedy, obese man who is drunk. Blurred because I thought some people might be triggered. It’s not an s word but a v word and even I don’t really like to use it 
But I wanted to make him seem just so incredibly pathetic.
Geoffrey smiled into the toilet bowl as if he could see his future in the vomit like a new, disgusting kind of fortuneteller.
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I am going to revamp Jorildyn’s story in Project Heir and Knight, by giving the story the same exact format that I used for The House of Naivin.
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I finished Chapter 0, Parts 1 and 2!
Now, I shall start Chapters 1, Part 1 later on today!
I finished at 5,751 words. I could only do two parts rather than five, because a prologue isn’t supposed to really be that long anyway.
I am super excited!
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Hello! Does anyone know of any updates about the ONC?
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They have officially announced it.
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Thank you!
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I finished Chapter 1, Part 1 of Project Heir and Knight.
I seriously need to come up with a new title for this story because the one I got is not meant for this story, like at all.
I finished at 2,172 words. This chapter was fun and oddly cute.
Princess Brianna is a such a friendly and excitable girl, that the Knights are nervous and uneasy around her at first.
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Sorry for the delay. It was my birthday and then my SO caught the flu and then it was his birthday, then I caught the flu - January has been all over the place! 
I’ll leave feedback on the original thread. 
Edit: Looks like I can’t reply on that thread so I’ll reply here. I like it! There are some powerful images and poetic devices at play. Repetition for one. Similes, and metaphors, though I feel like in this piece specifically, some lines might feel more powerful as metaphors instead of similes unless you’re actually comparing one thing to another. Don’t be afraid to move around lines, re-arrange words, and even space stanzas differently to change the impact or the “sound” of the poem. Read it out loud to see if it “sounds” as you intended.
Changing the tenses can change the poem too. Like, “Whimpers in dark alleys crawl, like maggots feasting on decay,” as an example. The poem sounds cool as is, but you can “evolve” it further if you’d like. You also already have words that are similar/close to rhyme if you want to go that route too, though not every poem has to rhyme.
Does that help?
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Oh my goodness 
It’s been quite a month then. Hope you and your SO are doing better now. Sending fox hugs 
and a late Happy Birthday to both of you.
Yes, it helps! Thank you! I had to put poetry editing to the side for a while, but I do want to get back into it. I’ll copy and paste your response somewhere…maybe in my personal threads or something, so it doesn’t get lost in the sea of responses.
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Going to finish the rest of part 3 in chapter 1 then move on to part 4.
Do to slight changes, I am adding nine parts for each chapter. When I get to the second draft, the story has to really show that Jorildyn is the main character and I still need a proper story title, but I am going to wait until I am finished with first draft.
I can’t worry about that now. I do also plan to shorten the number of chapters I give this story, since Jorildyn is the protagonist and focal character. Though there are other characters that are just as important too.
Things to change and whatnot.
Nothing else to report here!
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Yes! This is what I grew up hearing too–that AI would take over all the terrible jobs that no one wants to do: the dangerous, miserable, high physical labor blue collar jobs. And then we’d all have more time for making art, composing music, writing novels, etc. So the humanities would be safe. But for some insane reason, it’s going the other way: the only jobs that’ll be available to humans will be the dangerous, miserable jobs because AI is doing all the art, writing, etc. (-᷅_-᷄๑)
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You don’t seem to appreciate that the dangerous jobs are at the least risk because would you want a robot running a powerplant without a lot of human oversight? A shitty png never harmed anyone.
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(has never finished the one she did last year) 
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I haven’t even looked at WP for more than a second in the last few months. It’s become… kind of a hopeless place for me. I’m kind of accepting that it’s not a place where I’ll find success. Or feedback. Or anything much really aside from things to read.
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I totally understand that, and I am mostly on Wattpad now to enter contests, if I am being honest, or post something as an experiment. I do think that it has become very formulaic because they are picking stories that sell/will sell due to their publishing company. Unless you are what they’re looking for, there is a good chance that you won’t be successful.
And as for feedback, I think that somewhere like Scribophile would get you something detailed, if you’re into that, but you have to commit and review others’, which isn’t for everyone.
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I am done with part 3 of chapter 1.
Ooh there was some juicy things going on in that chapter.
Nobody died, but I understand how ruthless and cruel Empress Natasha is.
I shall start part 4 is later or tomorrow.
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I haven’t heard of Scribophile. 
I’m fine with reading and giving feedback. I’ve done it before on WP but that doesn’t seem to guarantee people will return the favor. Will look into it. Comments go a long way for me. Even if it’s just one person reading and leaving a comment occasionally, it does a lot for the dopamine deprived brain of mine that can’t do crap without the reward system. (sigh)
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