White room syndrome or talking heads syndrome

I noticed that I struggle with A LOT because when I am writing it is very hard for me to describe where exactly the characters are. That sucks because descriptions are hard for me to put into words to begin with. I know where the characters are but I can’t explain the surroundings properly because I suck at descriptions, and showing it. So, it feels like a bunch of characters talking in a white room that I have mentioned what it was, but it doesn’t matter. It still feels like a white room. There’s also the fact that the story takes place on a planet that isn’t Earth which has such alien things that I can’t explain—which means I might have to world-build better.

I mean I can edit and revise it, but writing it makes me so bitter.

What are your thoughts and feelings?

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I struggle with null scent syndrome. I tend to neglect the senses other than sight in my writing.

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It takes practice! I do little writing exercises where I just sit in a place and describe the surrounding. No plot, no character, no expectations. I find it very helpful when I eventually get to writing a scene.

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Describing things like sound, smell, and touch help in setting the mood, and I like including them when appropriate

For example, characters walking through an enchanted forest? That’s prime territory to include animal sounds (even if the animals are different from Earth’s), or stuff like leaves rustling if there’s a lot of wind. Is it a hot and humid forest, or a cold and dry one? Stuff like that helps it come to life.

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sometimes you need it, as you need to focus on the characters not the surroundings. it depends on the scene and how the characters are acting as sometimes the surroundings are a character in of themselfes

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Feel the character first, look through his/her eyes, think with his/her mind, hear and see with his/her ears and eyes… Put yourself in their place, then describe what they are engaged with…

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You might benefit from the Writer’s Thesaurus series. I use the Emotion Thesaurus sometimes when I’m editing and I just can’t figure out how I want a character to move.

They come as online versions originally, this one is the settings one:

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Considering your aphantasia post, it could be related to that? Idk, but do you think it could help you if you have a list of words associated with a certain place to help you describe it when the time comes? Like, say, you have some weird ocean, just write down all the things that would be in it (e.g. seaweed) and then do word association: seaweed is brown or green. It might be slimy, slime is shiny, shiny is sparkling… like that?

Idk. Just an idea

But I also think you don’t have to worry too much.

When I read books and the characters are in a place, I don’t recall ever coming to scenes where all the stuff is described. Maybe there’s mention of a table by a window? Maybe there’s a blanket on a bed and it’s fuzzy. Or maybe the trees above are hiding the sun and we smell wet autumn leaves.

It’s really minimal unless somehow a detailed description of the space is important to the plot. Maybe the character is trying to escape or something.

But what if it’s otherworldly and important to show? I have so many weird places in my stories. There’s an upside down forest in Between Roses. And in the World of Elgana books, and others. I just like weird forests.

I try to describe it in bits. Too much and it’s confusing. First, I focus on the upside down trees, where the leaves are like clouds and their roots are stretching up to the sky. Then we look at the sky. It’s not sky. It’s ground. There’s a pond above Eryn’s head and it’s not dripping down on her. She can almost reach it.

So yeah, bit by bit, and I keep bringing it up, too, in varying degrees of description, so the reader can become familiar with it. Later, Eryn is angry, so she kicks at the ground and kicks up cloud dust. She notices a crescent moon shining beneath her feet. It’s like it’s under glass. How pretty, but she’s also angry and frustrated. She leans against a tree and sobs.

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Thanks for the comment, Enna!

I like to think that a part of this is from me worrying too much. Not realizing that I can edit and revise drafts later.

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