𝒏𝒊𝒈𝒉𝒕𝒄𝒂𝒍𝒍 — 𝐢𝐧𝐬𝐨𝐦𝐧𝐢𝐚𝐜 𝐜𝐡𝐚𝐭𝐭𝐞𝐫

[LaviniaThompson]

Yes actually, she would

[Churro]

I’ll catslap her back

[LaviniaThompson]

I am not responsible for her actions after that

[Churro]

Will I start cat fight?

[LaviniaThompson]

Pretty much

[Churro]

eats her

[LaviniaThompson]

[Churro]

That’s the only pussy I’m gonna eat

[LaviniaThompson]

You said it, not me I withheld my comment because I don’t wanna get kicked off the thread. Mine was much more… inappropriate LOL

[Churro]

Yes.

I am the king of bypassing censors.

[FourcedowErsert]

@stella_vigo

I tried Googling it. Trust me, I’m pretty sure it’s not what you have in mind

I tried it too but I couldn’t find any relevant results Does it, by any chance, involve a mess of a huge weird equation? Or was that something else?

@stella_vigo

Never heard of it until you mentioned it I’ll see if it’s free somewhere until I get a job, which will be like three years from now, I don’t think I’ll be able to buy books that aren’t for school :’)

Yeah, a friend on wattpad actually recommended it to me. He was like, warning, it might contain a lot of Catholic references and symbols, but I was like, that sounds intriguing and I don’t mind at all, and I read it and IT WAS BETTER THAN I EXPECTED. It’s like… almost my favourite book in the world now. xD Could you not borrow it from the library? That’s what I did. I’m sure you could get a library card and check it out. There are probably a lot of libraries in the US. Libraries are a lifesaver.

@stella_vigo

Thanks for saying I’m great at descriptive!

Okay, I’ll try it just once, and maybe a few years from now after all my other projects are done I still need to improve my third person past

You really are! And yes, no need to rush, tackle it whenever you feel like it.

@stella_vigo

Oh, does it? I never noticed. What does my “voice” sound like?

Well, it kind of has that effect where it draws you in. I don’t know how to describe it in words, but if I may do a comparison… it sort of reminds me of the way people tell stories to their children. That strong, flowing tone that makes them go all wide-eyed and the intrigue sprinkled into it, like a window into a different aspect of the world. It’s just… strong, and knowing, and also gives the reader a flood of sensations. But I have to say your poetic voice is really strong too. It is. You just have a way with poetry. You bring out the emotional side more with that and connect it to meaningful ideas.

@stella_vigo

Oh I’ve looked up prose poetry, and I was intimidated. I can’t even handle “regular” poetry, I’m still working on prose, and combining the two together?

Okay, but I feel like you would be terrific in prose poetry. In fact, it would probably even be easier for you. Regular poetry can be stricter in terms of rhymes and metre. But prose poetry is imbued with all the beautiful ways of putting words together, like a flowing masterpiece. You certainly do that with your descriptions. And combined with your poetic sense, which is amazing, I tell you, it will bring out something great.

@stella_vigo

It’s the iambic pentameter I can do the pentameter but not the iambic. I mean, I get what they mean by iambic, but how do you determine whether a certain syllable is stressed? It’s hard enough to find rhymes, and now I have to focus on syllables and their stresses

It helps if you read it out. Or in your mind. The stress pattern can be somewhat confusing at times but to make it simple stick with which part of the word is emphasised when you speak it. Or test if it sounds natural by saying it exaggeratedly with the alternating stress pattern where the emphasis is on the second beat. For example, ‘the moon is shining over you tonight.’ That sounds pretty natural, doesn’t it? But if it was ‘the moon is shining over the hilltops’, it would not. Try not to get too caught up in the rules, that could detract from it too. Sometimes, relying on your intuition is a good bet. Get a feel for how it sounds.

@stella_vigo

Maybe I will once I finish my current poetry collection and its sequel (yes, I have a sequel collection planned ) and another planned collection of sonnets.

Oooh, I would love to read those.

@stella_vigo

but then again, my brain has a penchant for wanting to write things that I want to put off >.> why else am I working on BWT instead of Book Three?

true.

[LaviniaThompson]

Yes of course

[Churro]

I’m from Irishstan. Martian heritage.

[LaviniaThompson]

Sounds like an interesting time lol

[Churro]

Wheejwhedbfv is how we laugh.

[stella_vigo]

@FourcedowErsert

Does it, by any chance, involve a mess of a huge weird equation? Or was that something else?

The actual equation is simple, but it’s deceiving. It’s easy to make it complicated. I doubt you’d know unless you’re taking aeromechanics at my university.

@FourcedowErsert

Yeah, a friend on wattpad actually recommended it to me. He was like, warning, it might contain a lot of Catholic references and symbols, but I was like, that sounds intriguing and I don’t mind at all, and I read it and IT WAS BETTER THAN I EXPECTED.

Ooh, now you’re making me feel like reading it

Wait, by religious references, would you consider them blasphemous or not? Because if they are, I won’t be keen on reading them; they’re a touchy subject for me that’s actually why I refuse to read Dan Brown’s books.

@FourcedowErsert

Could you not borrow it from the library? That’s what I did. I’m sure you could get a library card and check it out. There are probably a lot of libraries in the US. Libraries are a lifesaver.

Well, my university’s in a pretty small town, not a big city :’) and even then, I tried looking at the university libraries online. No fiction. My parents also don’t want me to stray too far from campus because, you know, it’s my first year here and I’m a foreigner. I’ll try to get my hands on it.

another edit: just checked the libraries that are near my campus. None of them have it. The ones in a nearby city also don’t have it. My only option is to buy :’)

@FourcedowErsert

Well, it kind of has that effect where it draws you in. I don’t know how to describe it in words, but if I may do a comparison… it sort of reminds me of the way people tell stories to their children. That strong, flowing tone that makes them go all wide-eyed and the intrigue sprinkled into it, like a window into a different aspect of the world. It’s just… strong, and knowing, and also gives the reader a flood of sensations. But I have to say your poetic voice is really strong too. It is. You just have a way with poetry. You bring out the emotional side more with that and connect it to meaningful ideas.

Thanks! I never knew I was that good. My writing feels lackluster compared to what I’ve read like, your poetry is strong. I don’t think mine can ever hold a candle to it.

@FourcedowErsert

Okay, but I feel like you would be terrific in prose poetry. In fact, it would probably even be easier for you. Regular poetry can be stricter in terms of rhymes and metre. But prose poetry is imbued with all the beautiful ways of putting words together, like a flowing masterpiece. You certainly do that with your descriptions. And combined with your poetic sense, which is amazing, I tell you, it will bring out something great.

Okay, let’s hope I live up to your expectations gotta do more research then. But then again, I already have a ton of writing research to do, like sword techniques for example.

@FourcedowErsert

It helps if you read it out. Or in your mind. The stress pattern can be somewhat confusing at times but to make it simple stick with which part of the word is emphasised when you speak it. Or test if it sounds natural by saying it exaggeratedly with the alternating stress pattern where the emphasis is on the second beat. For example, ‘the moon is shining over you tonight .’ That sounds pretty natural, doesn’t it? But if it was ‘the moon is shining over the hilltops ’, it would not. Try not to get too caught up in the rules, that could detract from it too. Sometimes, relying on your intuition is a good bet. Get a feel for how it sounds.

I’ve been reading it in my head or mouthing it. The thing is, I can usually tell where the stresses are in a word. The problem is connecting those with other words in a way that the stresses also match up it’s a pain with words that have an odd number of syllables (usually the three-syllable ones). I’ve decided to not completely follow the rules with regards to stresses because I saw in one article, it said that even Shakespeare violated his own rules on occasion I’ll follow it as closely as possible, though

@FourcedowErsert

Oooh, I would love to read those.

Aww, thanks! The sequel will probably be out next year, but the sonnet one might be out soon don’t expect me to update them regularly or frequently though

EDIT: Google Books has a free preview of the third person present book. I’ll let you know my thoughts on it

EDIT 2: I read the preview. I read the prologue and the first two chapters and… you’re almost certainly going to hate me for this

I have to admit, the present tense wasn’t as jarring as I thought it would be. It was more natural than I expected. The story was nice. The descriptions were nice. The imagery was good. The diction was interesting. It was interesting overall.

However, I don’t like it that much to even consider it one of my favorites. I’m not sure if I even like it so far. I frankly think it’s much better in past tense. Occasionally I would read a paragraph, mentally change it to past tense, and vastly prefer the past tense version.

I’m sorry. Not a fan of third person present I think it’s the only third person POV I dislike; I enjoy it less than first person I really tried. I really tried. However, I don’t think I’ll ever warm up to third person present >.< It feels too “off” for me. I’ll stick with third person past for reading and writing maybe dabble in a little first person. I just don’t enjoy reading third person present, partially because my brain is screaming “MAKE IT PAST TENSE” whenever I do and automatically doing it for me to “fix” it if I can’t enjoy reading it, I know I won’t enjoy writing it. That’s why I don’t think I ever will, sorry unless we’re talking about story notes and blurbs.

And also I noticed that some of the dialogue had the comma lying outside the ending quotation mark, and it was bothering me while I was reading maybe it’s because I’m reading the ebook preview on Google Books?

Maybe if I read the whole book my view would change. I mean, I only read the prologue and first two chapters. What do you think? Do you think I’ll eventually warm up to it if I read the whole book?

Oh, and by the way…

@FourcedowErsert

Oh yesss, I did read a couple of her stories and I was stunned. It’s amazing. She used second person so perfectly. I’m definitely planning to read more of her stories later.

How did you discover her? I remember I was using the search function to find the newest completed short stories on Wattpad when I first came across one of her stories. After reading it, I checked out her profile. That’s how I discovered her.

[Churro]

Wow, I did ch 1.

[LaviniaThompson]

Yay! Good job!

[Churro]

Now, all I can think of is: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1CBN9fKeVB4 lol.

[LaviniaThompson]

Yas, I love that song